A bit derailed again

Busy week kept me from writing as much as I’d like and then my other story decided to set up camp in my head so I have been writing thousands of words a day, but none of it in The Shadow of Vale. I do have The Shadow of Vale over 86k now. 86,400 words or so. I have a pretty clear idea of the next few scenes, I just need to sit down and write them, but I am having too much fun with Keegan and Mara in Cardelsiff at the moment.

But, before I got derailed I did write a few hundred on this draft and hopefully having a clear idea of what is next will keep me chipping away at it next week.

Here’s a snippet:

              Agur narrowed his gaze. “Is it wrong to send him off alone or to send him off without you saying goodbye?”

              A tear spilled down her cheek. “Both. No one should face that alone, but I,” she swallowed and blinked against the tears. “I need to see him again. Even if I have just one more minute with him, I want it. Please let me go to him.”

Late update

This was kind of a rough week with a migraine and a few sleepless nights that made thinking, much less writing, difficult. I did move this draft over 85k, nearly 86k and started Aila’s second POV which I am finding a lot of fun. I adore her character, but she doesn’t get much page time in this story.

I also got to write a very anti-climatic scene that was actually pretty fun.

I might not have written much this week, but I did have fun when I got the chance.

I had so much trouble picking a snippet this week, but here we go, enjoy!

              “Zuriel!”

              They flew apart at the sound of Chiron’s voice. The wizard rushed into the room looking uncharacteristically frazzled. “The wards.”

              “I know.” Zuriel squeezed Aila’s hand and dropped it. “I felt it. Can you take her to Agur?”

              Chiron’s wide eyes landed on Aila, seeming to see her for the first time. He looked back to Zuriel and nodded, his composure returning somewhat. “Yes, of course.”

              Aila turned to Zuriel, grabbing his face, forcing him to look at her. “I love you. We will figure this out, whatever it is.”

              I wish that were true. He thought, but nodded and kissed her briefly, pulling back far sooner than he wanted.

              “Go.” He stepped back. Aila hesitated just a moment before turning and following Chiron.

              The wizard led Aila past Halvar and into the hall.

              Halvar raised his brow to Zuriel who turned and started gathering his armor.

              “You’re kissing again. Did you fix things?” Halvar asked as he helped Zuriel with his armor.

              “There is nothing to fix and no way to fix it if there were.” Zuriel growled.

              Halvar said nothing until they reached the last piece of armor. “It’s just temporary. After you deal with Samael, you and Aila can pick up where you left it.” He handed Zuriel his sword belt. “Try to leave things in a good place.”

              Zuriel stared at him a moment before blinking and taking the belt. His heart dropped as he realized he had made the wrong choice. He had to sell it. The way Halvar saw it was how everyone had to see it.

Good Week

I had several good writing days this week and the draft now sits just over 84K.

I have scratched out several versions of the scene I am working on so it feels pretty smooth writing it. The previous scene included one of my favorite characters to write, Harkin and I had a lot of fun with him.

Still in a rather sad part of the story, but some how I am still having fun writing. I feel its coming out well which is satisfying.

Snippets from this week’s work:

              “There must be something.” The voice was familiar though the tone was so out of place, Harkin couldn’t immediately place it. “Come on.”

              Harkin slid forward slowly, peering into the room as it came into view inch by inch. He barely breathed as the man shuffled around the room. Finally, the form of the man came into view, his back was to Harkin as he hunched over, searching through the small collection of books that sat in a pile near his bed. The man stood, pushing a hand through his black hair which appeared to have been an action  he’d done repeatedly through his search. He turned to the side and Harkin drew in a sharp breath as he realized who it was. Keiran.

              Pulling back into the vent, Harkin berated himself silently for reacting. If he’d been heard…

              “Harkin.”

              With his eyes squeezed shut, Harkin remained where he was, flattened against the bottom of the vent shaft, hardly daring to breath.

              “Well, that explains how you’ve been getting around then. I already know you’re there; you might as well come down.”

              He made no movement. Perhaps Keiran would assume he’d imagined it and leave. The sudden warmth in his enchanted slave cuffs disabused him of the notion.


              “I knew it.”

              Zuriel froze. Every function of his body seemed to cease at the sound of Aila’s voice. At once it felt like both a balm and a knife. He’d missed the sound of it, but there was a bite to it that cut him to the core. She was hurt and angry and she had good reason to be.

Bracing himself, he slowly turned to face her despite a deep urge to open another bleed and run. He’d been hiding for so long. As hard as it was going to be, she deserved some kind of answer, even if it couldn’t be the truth.

              As his eyes fell on her, his lungs emptied, and his heart crumbled in his chest. She stood with fire in her weary eyes, highlighted by the dark circles under them. The exhaustion and pain on her face and in her bearing broke something in him. He had done that. The hurt, lack of sleep. His choices had left her wounded physically and mentally and he hated himself for it.

Thanksgiving

I hope you all had a wonderful Thanksgiving. Me and my family did.

I did very little writing. The last time I opened the document was Tuesday, however, I did write over 1k before that so it’s now over 81k.

I am wrestling a little bit with scraping this and starting over because there are already several changes I want to make to it, but I think it would be best to finish this draft and do the rewrites for the next one. I do, however, pause and scribble on some of those rewrites on occasion. Technically I wrote about 3k this week, but most of it was rewriting the beginning scenes.

In part, I think I am fussing because Zuriel is really sad and it can be uncomfortable to write sometimes.

That said, here’s a bit of what I am working on:

              “The Glass Cup?” Zuriel asked with as casual an air as he could muster. It had been three days and he was running out of way to avoid Aila.

              Halvar stopped and turned to Zuriel with his brow raised. “This is your time with Aila.”

              “You’re always inviting me.” He shrugged. “Tonight I’m agreeing to go.”

              Halvar frowned and crossed his arms. “What’s going on with you?”

              “Nothing.” He shook his head. “Never mind. I’ll see you tomorrow.” Zuriel waved to Halvar who started to protest as Zuriel opened a warp bleed and stepped through. With a deflated huff he found himself standing in one of the hallways instead of the entry hall like he’d aimed for.

              He looked both ways before shrugging to himself and turning right, not certain where exactly he was in the palace.

              As he wandered the halls trying to figure out where he was, his mind drifted back to the same struggle he’d been wrestling with for days: Aila.

              His promised. His love. The woman whose heart he couldn’t protect no matter what he chose to do. If he ended it, he would hurt her. If he stayed and simply put off marrying her, she’d be hurt by both his behavior and [redacted event]. He couldn’t tell her why they couldn’t marry and he hadn’t come up with a good enough lie to fill in the lack.

              Realizing he was near his room, he relaxed somewhat and started toward his chambers, but froze at the sound of soft singing.

              Aila.

Hit a bit of a snag but still working

I have passed 80k for The Shadow of Vale now. I have a pretty good idea of where the next bit is going, I just need to decide which of the little paths to take to get the characters and story to move where I’d like. Most of my work this week has been in a scene with Harkin laying down some foreshadowing which is always fun for me and is a special relief from Zuriel’s scenes at the moment.

Here’s a snippet of my time with Harkin this week:

              He took a deep breath before nimbly jumping off the bookcase and landing in a crouch on the cold stone floor where he lingered a long moment, taking in the familiar space.

              With a grin on his lips, he stood and ran his fingers along the spines of the books on the shelf as he moved deeper into the library where he’d spent the first fifteen years of his time in Halcyon after the fall. It felt good to be tucked away within the wards again despite his ever-present anxiety that they would finally work out enough anchor points to break the ward, or perhaps just punch a hole large enough to get something or someone inside.

              For fifteen years he worked through Agur’s histories and notes. After seven years he was completely convinced that all would be lost if Samael got his hands on the information tucked away in these halls. In meticulously recorded notes, thousands of years of learning stood waiting to be picked up and brought to life again. What it would do with that life would depend on who revived it.

              From what he read in Agur’s personal histories, he could see why The Great Creator would ordain elders to live such extensive lives. Only through such lengthy study could anyone hope to reach the apex of what magic could do. The things Agur had worked out not only about magic, but the ways of man, couldn’t be learned any other way as far as he could see.

              Though he wasn’t certain that the perspective of a broken odiar mattered even when aimed at the mind of the greatest wizard who ever graced Vale.

Big Week

I had several really productive writing days and I am just over 79k now.

A lot of what I wrote this week is highly spoilery as it’s a pivotal point in the story and I am having a lot of fun writing it, though I suspect a lot of it won’t survive revision as there is a bit of thinking on the page going on.

That said, I wanted to share a good chunk of it that doesn’t spoil, but hopefully peeks interest. Enjoy!

              Agur nodded, his eyes drifted from Zuriel as if looking at him was uncomfortable. “Vale is a nymph planet. A young one. We aren’t certain how our elder system works yet, but each nymph planet has elders. The numbers differ. The life spans. There is one planet I’ve read of where one of the races has no elder.” His eyes landed on Zuriel with disconcerting focus, though it seemed an action Agur had to force himself to do. “As far as we can tell, there is one Vale elder for each race and we live until we are killed.” He turned and began to pace again. “We might be able to get sick and die, but that hasn’t been confirmed.”

              Zuriel watched Agur’s movements in silence as he seemed to be lost within his own mind. Why had he come to his room, warded it, and went on a rant about elders on nymph planets?

              As if reading his mind, Agur stopped and let out a sigh. “I am nearly as old as Vale.” His was low and carried a note of sorrow. “I have lost track of my precise age, but I am in my eleventh millennium. Ten thousand seven hundred and something years, give or take a century.” He turned to face Zuriel who’s mouth had dropped open. A breath of a laugh escaped the wizard at the sight. “I say this to explain that I no longer remember what it is to be mortal. To fear death.” All humor left him as he dropped his eyes again.

              A deep sense of unease filled Zuriel as the elder wizard seemed to wrestle with himself.

              “I’ve grown accustomed,” he began again, slowly pacing with his hands behind his back, “to creating and carrying out long term plans. Perhaps my decision to avoid marrying again has proven to leave me at a disadvantage. I had sent Cyrus and Akil out to find a nymph son, but when Samael began his attack, I will confess, I was surprised. I believed I had more time.” He sighed and shook his head before continuing.

              “I had planned to create several duelings.” He gestured to the room around them, “This hadn’t been meant to stand as a last bastion against Samael, but was intended as a training grounds. I had meant for you to be better prepared.”

              When Agur’s voice faded Zuriel spoke up, voicing the fear that the wizard’s demeaner and words had been pulling back to the front of his mind. The fear that had taken him weeks to push aside. “You don’t think I can beat him.”

              With another heavy sigh Agur met Zuriel’s eye. The regret in his gaze sent a chill through Zuriel.

              “You were created to be Samael’s undoing, but what you have to do to achieve it…” He shook his head and looked away again. “It isn’t fair to ask of you. I have no other solution to offer, even now.” Raising his eyes to Zuriel’s again he added, “but it isn’t fair.”

              Zuriel felt his mouth go dry. “What do I have to do?”

              Agur held his gaze in silence for a long moment. Zuriel’s heart pounded as he watched the wizard’s internal struggle as it presented itself across his features. He opened his mouth several times before he finally spoke again. “You have to…….[redacted]”

Much more reading than writing this week

I read like 6 books this week so I have been much more absorbed in reading than writing. The Shadow of Vale is now sitting around 52,800 words so I wrote a little under 3k this past week.

I normally try to update Saturday or Sunday but I read three books in the past two days so I honestly forgot. Haha

I’ve been reading a bit of fluff so I haven’t exactly been in a fantasy headspace, but I am doing a reread of The Bound and The Broken series by Ryan Cahill (Highly recommend if you’ve never heard of it. He’s a fantastic writer and story teller.) so hopefully that will help get me back into gear to finish this draft.

I am still wrestling with a lot of the plot lines and characters but most of what I wrote this week was centered around Zuriel and Aila’s relationship. Given the reality that the core of the story is centered around them, I guess that makes sense.

While there isn’t much to pick from this week, I did want to include a little snippet. Pretty inline with my reading this week. Enjoy!

              As he neared the garden his mouth fell open at the transformation. It was no longer a simple, cleanly manicured garden, but a rich complex display of what seemed to be hundreds of plants ornamented by stone structures and two fountains.

              “Wow.” He said softly as he reached out to touch a draping vine with vibrant pink flowers.

              “Agur said this garden is mine now.” She raised her shoulders in a sweetly apologetic way. “I might have gotten carried away.”

              “It’s amazing.”

              Aila said nothing for a moment as Zuriel slowly stepped into the garden, admiring her work.

              “Do you recognize any of them?”

              Zuriel turned to her with faint alarm in his eyes. “Are these all medical plants?”

              Aila laughed. Zuriel couldn’t help but smile.

              “Not all of them, but most of them.”

              “Well, this is a whole lot more than seven.” He chuckled and continued his study of the garden.

              “I’ve been doing some research.”

              Zuriel turned back to her. “How does it work? The life point? Do you have to know the plants to create them?”

              Aila stepped forward to stand beside him. “Not exactly. When I’m connected to the life point they are just there. I know a lot about them just from pulling their essence from the life point, but I don’t necessarily know their names or how we use them.” She pointed to one plant that appeared to be a purple cactus. “I don’t know what that one is. It’s similar to Aloe, but it has a higher antiseptic quality.”

              Zuriel let out an awed breath. “That’s amazing. Of all the magics I didn’t get.” He let out a brief laugh. “The only magic I’ll never be able to teach is what I’ll pass on. You’ll have to be the one to teach-” He snapped his mouth shut as he realized what he had been saying.

              “Our children.” Aila finished softly. “I was wondering if that had occurred to you yet.”

              His heart raced as he scanned the garden, no longer seeing it, simply avoiding looking at her. He had an overwhelming desire to apologize and he wasn’t sure why.

Productive week in Vale

I have nearly reached 28k for this draft. I’ve been doing lots of world building, character work and work in the magic systems this week. Its been fun playing around with some new characters and piecing together some of the subplots.

A notable bit of work I did was centered around Halvar’s character as I’ve never fleshed out a backstory for him before, at least not one that goes back to his family. So, congrats Halvar, you know have your own tragic origins. Not as tragic as some of the other characters and since I have more fleshed out characters on the “villain” side, there are actually characters in the story that don’t have utterly depressing origins and histories.

One fun element I have been playing with are the links, one of the aspects of the telepathic magic of the naims. I’ve always had an idea of them being of use in long distance communication and I finally fleshed that idea out as well as the different ways a naim’s mind would link with other people and dragons. It’s always been a challenging aspect of the plot as it impacts basically everyone’s relationship with Zuriel.

Bit of a longer Excerpt this week, Enjoy!

Zuriel turned his attention back to Halvar as the witch placed her hand on Halvar’s temple and muttered her spell. Halvar groaned and opened his eyes.

“I’ve brought your dinner. Zuriel’s back.” The witch said pleasantly and helped Halvar sit up to eat.

“That was a dirty trick.” Halvar said to the witch with a scowl. “There is no need to cast sleeping spells on me like some prisoner.”

              “I’m sorry, Halvar. You know its not my call.” She said softly as she laid the tray on his lap.

              “Get out.” Halvar said sharply as he took up his fork.

              “I’ll make sure your dinner arrives soon.” She said to Zuriel, unphased by Halvar’s demeanor.

              Zuriel thanked her and waited for the door to close before turning his attention to Halvar.

              “That was rude.”

              “Rude is keeping me asleep like I’m some child.” He shot back, stabbing his food twice and shoving the bite in his mouth.

              “They’re just trying to help.”

              “Don’t you start.” Halvar said around his food, pointing at Zuriel with his fork. “Don’t act like you have any idea what its like.” He stabbed his plate again. “Sitting here useless while you are freaking out,” He laid his fork down and look at Zuriel, “I could feel it. That absolute terror you felt, I felt it and I had no idea what was happening.” He made a sort of growl and took his fork up again. “Then they put me under like my reaction was unreasonable.”

              “I’m sorry, Ray. Even if I knew how to send, I’m not even sure I could have in the moment.”

              “Halvar,” he said gruffly. “My name is Halvar. I’ve missed my name.” He added, sounding very much like a child.

              “Halvar, sorry. Lonan taught me the basics so I should be able to send to you now if anything like that happens again.”

              “Which wasn’t his job.” Halvar spoke with his eyes on his plate. “And if something like that happens again,” he met Zuriel’s eyes. “The Great Creator help whoever tries to stop me from getting to you.” He frowned and resumed his aggressive loading of the fork.

              Zuriel sat in silence for a moment. “I am starting to see why they call you my guardian.”

              “I am your guardian. That’s the charge Agur gave me. Its part of why he made me the way that I am.”

              “The time control.”

              “Aging control.” He gave a tight grin. “I can’t control time, though I appreciate the vote of confidence.”

Productive writing this week

Happy Easter!

I managed to add 5,898 words to The Shadow of Vale this week. The word count now sits at 39,412.

The writing this week mostly focused on Zuriel’s training which shows how some of the magic works and introduces a few interesting more minor characters.

Here are some excerpts from this week:

           Normal sounded good. Perhaps after a few snacks and a nap he would feel more prepared to face Agur. As the hour drew closer, he found that he dreaded facing the wizard before whom he had behaved so rudely the day before.

             He took a few of what looked like white grapes and sat down. “What branch of wizard magic do you focus on?”

             Chiron’s eyebrows went up in surprise. “Blocking mostly. I dabble in healing, its hard to avoid when you live in the castle. Most of the wizards here are healers. But blocking is what I am best at, what I most enjoy. Never been much for blood and burns.” He frowned in a way that was nearly comical in it’s extreme.

             “Agur said I will focus on imbuing and healing.” It crossed his mind that he had said it was because it would be most helpful to him and his men. “I wonder if I might enjoy some of the other’s more.” He shook his head. “Guess it doesn’t matter.”

             “I could show you some blocking magic if you would like. It might be a bit much to add to your tasks, but if you enjoy it perhaps it would be good to work on a magic you enjoy.”

             Zuriel smiled. “I appreciate that, but I truly do have more to do than I have time for as it is. Tell me about it though. It would be nice to know something about the other five I won’t be learning.” He finally threw one of the grapes into his mouth. They tasted like grapefruit. He swallowed them with a grimace.

             “Those are particularly helpful if it makes the taste any better.” Chiron said with a smile before shifting over to discussing blocking magic. “Blocking magic is complex, which is what I enjoy about it. It blends the magic of ores with spoken spells. There are similarities between casting a block and imbuing and item. If you think about it, casting a block is really imbuing an item, typically a stone totem, with a block spell.”

             “So, you put the magic in like a stone and it blocks magic around it? Agur had me do a block when he was testing to see if I had all of the wizard magic.” Zuriel leaned forward, picking one of the last items on the plate.

             “Basically, though it does relate to the magic of the stone used. Sometimes you have to craft the stone which gets complicated. I have to do it more often these days. Many of our ore came from the Tala nymphs and they have been gone many years now.” Chiron looked sadly at the floor a moment before returning to his typical joviality. “What sort of magic did you block?”

             “Wizard.”

             Chiron looked with surprise at Zuriel. “Did it work?”

             Zuriel nodded as he bit into the last pastry. He had braced himself and was pleasantly surprised to find it reminded him of coffee.

             “You blocked wizard magic.” Chiron sat dumbly for a moment. “How did you even know how to do that? What stone to use and the spell to cast?”

             “Agur had everything ready for me, he told me what to do and say and it worked.”

             “Wizard magic block. That is difficult. It was an entire year of knowing the spell before I could extend it beyond a foot of the stone.” Chiron looked at Zuriel with a strange sort of wonder that made him uncomfortable. It was off putting to have people look at him like that; like he was a god.

—

             “Alright, that’s enough of that.” Cyrus said as he helped Zuriel back on his feet. “Run the course.”

             Zuriel sighed and leaned his sword against the bench before obediently running off to the course Cyrus has set up to help him build up his strength and endurance. After three runs through it, he returned to Cyrus who was running through a few moves with his sword while he waited.

             “You didn’t even watch.” Zuriel said breathless.

             “You are out of breath, that means it’s working. There isn’t a technique for getting stronger beyond, do the course. I don’t need to watch you.” Cyrus sheathed his sword. “One more match.”

             “What? You said we were done.”

             “Now we see if you can do what I showed you when you are tired.”

             “I can’t do them when I’m not tired!”

             Cyrus only smiled and pointed to the sword resting against the bench. Zuriel stared at Cyrus a moment who only gestured once more.

             “Fine.” Zuriel said and went to grab his sword. Without giving him a chance to set up, Cyrus set in on him. Zuriel held his own a moment, blocking the first two blows. Beyond that he was unable to keep Cyrus’ strikes from landing, nor could he land any of his own. He collapsed onto the bench, out of breath. Annoyed at this new tactic.

             “That was better than I expected.” Cyrus said.

             “Great to know you have faith in me Cyrus.”

             “I do have faith in you. If I didn’t, I wouldn’t be out here.” Cyrus took a seat beside his pupal.

—

[For context, the previous scene had Halvar telling Zuriel he would need to learn dances for an annual ball they hold in Halcyon. They also moved up their training to make room for his imbuing lessons.]

             The next morning Zuriel begun the day with an extra cranky Halvar who only just managed to keep his composure as Zuriel dropped him from his hold, repeatedly.

             “I’m sorry. This is really hard.” Zuriel hurried to where Halvar lay on the grass.

             Halvar pushed him away as he got to his feet. “I swear if you drop me one more time, I will teach you fake dances.”

             “Here, use me.” Aila suggested, sensing Halvar’s deep annoyance.

             “Oh, I don’t want to drop you.”

             “But dropping me is fine?” Halvar sniped.

             “Did you eat? I think you’re hangry.”

             “I’m not hangry, I’m tired of getting dropped by your amateur ass.” Halvar said, roughly swiping the dirt from his clothes.

             “I ate. I’m fine. I think you got most of your dropping out of your system. I’m lighter too.” Aila pressed.

             Halvar put his hands up and walked toward the bench.

             “Come on, Halvar! Don’t be sore.”

             “I wouldn’t be if you would stop dropping me.” He called over his shoulder as he continued across the courtyard.

             “Come on. You have to be in your next lesson soon.” Aila said, trying to draw his attention back.

             Zuriel sighed. “I don’t want to drop you.”

             “Then don’t. Come on. You can do this.”

              Zuriel stared at her a moment, trying to find away out of it.

             “If you don’t pick me up, I am going to pick you up.” Aila said as she crossed her arms, looking at him defiantly.

             “I have no idea what that means, but fine.” Zuriel gave in and readied himself. He managed to get the hold around her without closing it too tight. His first attempt to lift her didn’t work as he held her too loosely. She was smaller than Halvar whom he had just got used to lifting. Finally, he managed to lift her briefly. He set her down quickly to avoid the hold slipping.

             Aila smiled as she touched back on the ground. “See, you didn’t drop me. Try again.”

About the World of Vale

The planning process for the second draft is a bit more fun and productive than I had thought it would be given how much I dislike planning. With the first draft written I feel like I have less of a drive to just push through it, so I can sit back and play with some of the plot lines and elements.

A lot of the plot lines are deeply impacted by the world of Vale and the magic that exists on it so I thought it would be fun to introduce you to some of the history of Vale.

Vale was created by a race called Nymphs. Now, the nymphs in Vale aren’t a carbon copy of mythological nymphs you might be familiar with. Nymphs posses a magic which is referred to as creation magic. They are able to link to one of three life points: Earth [or Tera], water, and plants. By linking to one of these points, they are able to draw from it and create or manipulate the element. This is how Abner, the elder nymph who created Vale was able to build this small world between the realms of Cordilsif and Earth.

Vale was created as a refuge for magic beings who were unsafe in their own realms. Naims, a telepathic race, were the primary inspiration for Abner founding Vale. Nymphs have a close relationship with Naims, particularly in Vale because the telepathic abilities of the Naims allow them to create a ‘bleed’ between realms which allowed the nymphs to flee with the naims in the first place.

Across the bridges constructed leaning to Vale in the ages of its founding, a total of four races found a home in Vale. These were the two already mentioned, the nymphs and naims as well as wizards and sorcerers. When the dangers from which they had fled discovered the bridges, they were dismantled and Vale was left to itself.

Vale is about the size of America and most of the links between Earth and Vale in the book exist in California.

Most of the history of Vale is peaceful, but as time passes, there is one sorcerer who, believing himself a more worthy ruler than Agur, the elder wizard appointed by Abner, disrupts this peace following the death of Abner in an attempt to take the throne. This is the point in Vale’s history where our story begins.

-Michelle