While I worked through a lot of the new problems some of the changes I made created, I realized that it’s a story and I can change anything in it that doesn’t work. As a result, I have made massive changes that I am excited to write out.
That said, it reads very much like the first draft I wrote out just trying to catch the ideas, so the actual writing is very rough. I’m just trying to get the sketch of events down really. Some weeks I might not include snippets for that reason and at a certain point I might stop anyway because I think it is getting close to its final form and I don’t want to give too many spoilers.
That said, this draft is now over 7600 words long. And here is a brief snippet from my labors this week:
Halvar looked up at him. “Are you okay?”
Aaron just shook his head. He was absolutely not okay.
Halvar nodded to himself and looked back to Aila.
“I don’t…why? Why did she-? Why would she…?” Aaron sputtered, trying to make the scene before him make sense.
“I don’t know exactly.” Halvar shook his head. “She must have seen Kyra and realized she was caught.”
“You…she…was that lightning? Did, did she try to strike you with, with lightning?”
Halvar nodded. “You snapped her neck.” Aaron suddenly felt sick.
